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"I gaze out into the horizon at the beautiful sunset,
that ocean of calm colors, so far away.

And I lay there,
my body is such a virgin to all the wonders of the world.

There's so many things to do,
places to see, and people to meet,

I have dreams of doing it all.
But right now, I'm just going to lay back and enjoy the sunset."
:icondanlev:
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Photo by me (No color manipulation)

Feel free to comment on the photo, Just as long as you comment on the poem too :D
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:iconhellstar:
its so dreamlike and serene.
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:iconjahg:
*jahg Sep 10, 2004  Professional Writer
I'm not so sure the poem needs the italic, it seems to make it a little more difficult to read in my view. Also, the third stanza is much too obvious, those phrases have been used a million times before, in the same context. How about twisting those phrases slightly, perhaps use alternative wording - slightly exotic wording, perhaps?

The photograph goes very well with the poem, such beautiful natural colouring.

Regards,

James
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:icondanlev:
$danlev Sep 10, 2004  Hobbyist Photographer
thanks. I thought of changing the wording on it but i didnt like the way it sounded for some reason. But ya i should stay away from commonly used phrases. thanks for the commetn!
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:icondtr-tam-atti:
that's an awesome poem, i like the use of words, such as virgin, i dont know, it's just very good and laid back, nice photo as well
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:iconbr0k3npromise:
i like the poem.. its nice n simple .. n hopeful.. just nice :)
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:iconxwhisperx:
mmm. lovely.
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:iconpunkie078:
~punkie078 Sep 7, 2004  Professional Photographer
good poem. i'm not good with non-rhymey poems.
i like the pic. very cool.
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:iconmossytreehead:
the poem fits the pic so wonderfuly...wow
go you :)
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:icontaryn16:
~Taryn16 Sep 6, 2004  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Touching poem, It has a relaxed feel about it, full of whimsy.
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